Hi Lucio,
Kate and I looked at our Migrahack project again, and found the following issues. Kate agrees that it would be nice to fix them. Our project is mentioned in press releases now, and it would be great to have the corrections as soon as possible so we put our best foot forward. I know you're busy, but could you fix them please? : )
I would fix them, but don't want to mess with the project. I might introduce more errors!!
The formatting looks a little better -- not completely left-justified, but not as ragged looking.
In looking it over again, I'm wondering if the intro and conclusions should be switched around. The intro material is a projection into the future, while the conclusion sounds more like intro material. (Kate agreed that these two sections should be switched, with the intro material replacing the conclusory material, and the conclusory material replacing the introductory material.)
Here are a few other items:
- More than half of the child migrants whose cases are were adjudicated in Arizona were from Guatemala. Many others come from El Salvador, Honduras or Mexico.
Cross out "are" and leave "were".
- There are eight possible outcomes for child migrants going through immigration court proceedings. The most frequent outcome of a court hearing was transfer of the case to another immigration court or another state. Children with attorneys are less likely to be deported or transferred to another state. The majority of kids have multiple proceedings.
"...majority of children" rather than "majority of kids"
- "Well the most dramatic issue that we are talking about here is when a child or anybody doesnβt have legal counsel their understanding of what is going on in immigration law proceedings is extremely limited."
Comma after "well" and after "counsel"
- Unaccompanied child migrants often encounter tremendous risks throughout their journeys into the United States. If they are apprehended after entering the U.S., they begin a new journey through the federal justice system. For these children, access to legal representation can influence how this new journey unfolds and whether they are ultimately allowed to stay."
Remove quotation marks after "stay".
- We need identifiers for the experts--their titles and affiliations.
Thank you so much, Lucio!!
Susan